She used to strut around my office, teasing me with her tight curves and long legs.
Begging to be bent over my desk.
I ached for her, but she was off-limits.
Her father was my business partner, someone I called a friend.
Until he betrayed me. Took everything from me.
Now all I can think about is what I’m going to take from him.
Her.
Claiming her will ruin him.
The fact that her luscious body will finally be mine is just a bonus.
But Lily’s sweeter than I remember.
Her innocence is chipping away at a part of my heart I thought had hardened forever.
I had planned on enjoying my payback ...
I just hadn't counted on her.
This one as it wasn't at all what I expected. I expected steam and I got that, but the huge suspension of belief required for the story wasn't something I anticipated. After the eye-rolling prologue, maybe I should've seen it coming, but I kept reading. At the start of the story, Jacob comes across as arrogant and selfish, with little regard for anyone else, so for him to willingly sacrifice himself for others would be contrary to that. Then, years later, when he goes after Lily out of revenge, she jumps at the chance to go out with the man she thinks betrayed her father. Lily is innocent as far as relationships and intimacy are concerned, but her father is all she has and it appears that they are close in the beginning, so I can't fathom a situation where a supposedly intelligent young woman would so easily accept any kind of invitation from Jacob, let alone a date. Then, to add insult to injury, when everything comes out, Jacob has no clue what was going on with his partner and mentor during the time of said betrayal? I realize that it's fiction, but it has to make sense for the world that it is set in. The story is novella length, so maybe a bit more fleshing out of the story would've helped, but there are just too many things that don't work here.
If you like steam without much substance, then you may enjoy this one more than I did.
His Virgin Payback is available on Amazon and is listed in Kindle Unlimited.
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